麻烦大家看看这段话,都那里错了。另外那些地方怎么改进改进。。。
“垂询”作为谦辞,是本人自谦的的用语,也是表示对对方的尊敬。但是要注意谦辞一定是本人使用的。
比如很多销售公司宣传时公布的咨询电话会写成“垂询热线:****”,是表示该公司对顾客的尊敬和欢迎顾客对其产品的咨询。
在你的例句中,是第三者在叙述区领导答复家长咨询这件事,而不是区领导本人在对家人的咨询做答复,所以他不能以第三方的身份替区领导使用谦辞。
举个简单的例子,“犬子”也是谦辞。
当你父亲和别人提到你的时候,他可以说“犬子”怎样怎样。
但是你隔壁邻居和别人说到你时,是不可能说“我邻居家的犬子”怎样怎样的。
与其类似的,古代丈夫和别人提到自己妻子的时候会说“贱内”。
比如张三和他的好友李四说:“贱内做菜很好吃。”
李四又告诉王五,他就会说:“张三的妻做菜很好吃。”
如果他说:“张三的贱内做菜很好吃。”就非常不合适了。
与“垂询”类似的有“蓬荜生辉”。
比如,你的老师到你家,你们表示欢迎可以说老师的光临让你们家蓬荜生辉,但是你的同学不能说老师到你家让你家蓬荜生辉。
明白了么?谦辞其实多用于交际用语,一定是本人使用的;同样的,敬辞,如“令尊”等,都是要本人使用的。用谦辞、敬辞一定要考虑语境和人物关系。在叙述文中,一般是不需要使用谦辞和敬辞的。
其实你多读几遍,再重新造个句,对比一下,就会感觉有所不同了。
中文是很有内涵和韵味的,谦虚也是中华民族的传统美德,希望我的粗浅认识对你在谦辞的应用方面能有所帮助。 :)
根据你要表达的意思,有三个地方改...介词,时态和固定搭配 ()注明
My last weekend was interesting. let me tell you about my last weekend. On Saturday night,I played badminton with some friends in the park.The park is my favorite place.I helped my mother (to) cook lunch in the afternoon.My mother taught me how (to) make lunch.In the evening,I did my homework. On Sunday morning,I went to the zoo.Everything was about animals and I (was) interesting in that.I went boating with my father in the afternoon.It was so much fun.In the evening,I studied for an English test.All in all,I like my last weekend very much.
Hello! (和后面的招呼有重复,删去一个,建议选后者,比较适合出示见面的开场白)Everyone.
I'm new here. This is my first day work. (这里的“这是”可以用“It’s”表示,读来更为顺口,因为简洁是日常口语表述的第一原则)
gold to meet everyone! (这里应改为“glad”,“gold”是黄金的意思,首字母应大写。估计这是讲稿,所以关于大小写和标点的问题后面就不多改了另:在现场说“很高兴认识大家”,直接用“Glad to me you”就可以了,因为“you”可以表示“你们”,是比较习惯的用法。)
First(表示“首先”,用“firstly”或者“at first”比较准确严谨。), let me introduce myself. (自我介绍时用“allow sb. to do sth.”的句式会比较委婉,即“please allow me to introduce myself”)
My name is Chris, my nickname is 旺才and almost know to call me 旺才 , so , I hope everyone call me 旺才 too。 (这段话可改为更口语化的表达:“My name is Chris and my friends always call me Wangcai. Yeah, that’s my nickname. Of course, you can call me Wangcai, too, cause we’re friends now, right? ”-“我叫Chris,我的朋友们都叫我旺财。没错,那是我的绰号。当然,你们也可以叫我旺财,因为我们是朋友了,对吗?”这样更有现场感和亲和力,你觉得呢?)
I was born in Beijing and from a middle family.(英文对环境的表述习惯和汉语是相反的,应由小到大,所以改为“I was born in a middle-class family of Beijing”,“middle-class”是指“中产阶级”,如果觉得太过正式,用楼上hell_fire的提供的“well-off”也不错)
My address is Room 16F 1 , building 25 , wangfujing . (这句话准确的表述应该是:“My address is Room 1, the 16th floor, building 25, Wangfujing”,更口语化一点可以说:“My house is in Wangfujing, and the address is Room 1, the 16th floor, building 25.”)
My age is nearly 25 to be 25 a week later. (这句话可简化为:“I will be 25 years old next week.”此外,这句话放在这个位置有点突兀,是不是移到出生地介绍后面更好一点?)
My telephone number is 55555555 , mobile telephone is 55555555555. (这句话的表述没有问题,但比较死板,建议可用“If you wanna give a call, you can dial 55555555 or 55555555555 to reach me.”l另:如果你的所在公司的语言环境是英式英语,请将“wanna”改为“want to”.)
At present I remain a university but I'll be graduage at once .
(尚未毕业的大学生应用“undergraduate”表示,全句可改为“Though I’m still a undergraduate now, I’ll graduate soon.”)
That's why I have to look for a job before a month. finally , I come here . (“找工作”用“hunt for a job”会显得更专业一些;“before a month”是“一个月前”的意思,无持续性,应改为“since a/one/single month ago”句式调整为“That’s why I have to hunt for a job since a month ago.”但是,这句话给人被迫求职的情绪,会影响他人对你工作积极性的评价,建议删去不提;或以更积极向上的语句来替换,比如:“As a new staff here, I won’t let you down(作为一名新员工,我不会让你们失望的)”等等,暂时没想到更好的内容,请再斟酌斟酌。)
Second(同上面一样,改为“Secondly”,但看了下文后觉得脸段话似乎没有承接关系,所以将“其次”改为“此外”吧), I often do part-time job during shcool(拼错了,是“School”). My major lesson is computer. I'm interested in playing chess and watching TV, especially I(这个“I”是多余的) like watching(这个“watching”也可以删掉) 闲人马大姐, haw~ haw~ (“哈哈”的写法是“haw-haw”或者“ha-ha”,你的写法译过来成了“山楂~山楂~”或者“左转~左转~”)for feel very funny . (“for”后面应该跟名词性从句,要用“for its funny gut”,“gut”是“剧情”的意思。但是,“for”通常表示的是客观原因,“觉得有趣”是主观情绪,用“because of”替换之。)
另:这段话的整体语序需要调整一下。
Finally, if I make a(用“any”更好些,表示不确定指向) mistake , hope everyone to teach me at any time,please . can't thank you enough .(从句缺少主语,调整为:“if I make any mistake, please point out and tell me how to put it right. I’ll make a grateful acknowledgement for you.”在这样的场合,我认为还是应该有一个比较正式的结尾,以显示诚恳。)
有点乱,归整一下:
Glad to me you, everyone! I'm new here.
It’s my first day work. So firstly, please allow me to introduce myself.
My name is Chris and my friends always call me Wangcai. Yeah, that’s my nickname. Of course, you can call me Wangcai, too, cause we’re friends now, right?
I was born in a middle-class(well-off) family of Beijing, and I will be 25 years old next week.
My house is in Wangfujing, and the address is Room 1, the 16th floor, building 25. If you wanna(want to) give a call, you can dial 55555555 or 55555555555 to reach me.
Though I’m still a undergraduate now, I’ll graduate soon. As a new staff here, I won’t let you down.(这句话我自我感觉还不是很好,请再斟酌)
Besides, my major lesson is Computer. I often do part-time job during school. I'm interested in playing chess and watching TV, especially like 闲人马大姐, because of its funny gut. haw-haw!
Finally, if I make any mistake, please point out and tell me how to put it right. I’ll make a grateful acknowledgement for you.
。。。终于打完了,自我鼓励一下先:)
问题很多啊 毕业单词写错 从一个月前 from one month ago 学生单词写错 高兴见到大家是glad不是gold 几乎所有认识我的人都叫我旺财 有问题 中等富裕也有问题 年龄那也有问题 移动电话后没加number
this is my first day work应该在work前加to and almost know to 这句话没主语so , I hope everyone call me 旺才 too。hope用错了hope后面只能加to do sth,不能加hope sb to do sth.应该用wish后面还有一些错误,问题不大,应该多注意一些语法。记好单词,加油吧
问题真大!翻译出来的中文你看:
大家你好:我 ' 新米,这里是我的第一天工作. 黄金应付大家! 首先,让我介绍一下自己. 我的名字叫克里斯,是我国之旺,必有近知道叫旺剧,所以我希望大家叫我太旺。必有我出生在北京,一个家庭中. 我的地址是16f1室,建立25个,王府井. 我25岁,是近一个星期后,将25. 我的电话号码是55555555,移动电话55555555555. 我现在仍然是我的大学 ' 有一次graduage11. 这 ' 所以我要在一个月内找工作. 终于,我来到这里. 第二,我经常做兼职工作期间shcool. 我主要是电脑课. 一 ' 米兴趣下棋、看电视. 我特别喜欢看马人闲。姐带大带0. 一场很有趣的~力~. 最后我犯了一个错误,我希望大家都来教,请随时. 可以 ' 谢谢t不够.
都不知道你在写什么!
我想可以这样
Good evening : I was new, this is the first day to go to work. We are pleased to recognize. First : Let me introduce myself, my name is Chris, known to be busy, and almost all call people I know I was busy, so I hope everyone called me. I was born in Beijing in the middle of a wealthy family. My address is Wang Fu Jing, No. 25, 16-1 (the 16 - that I want to say 1601, and she has told 201,301 into the 1601 How stresses spreading ~?) I just one week on 25, my phone is 55555555, 55555555555 mobile phone is now I still a student, But I will immediately graduate. This wine is why I have to find a job from one month ago. Finally, I came to here ~
请大家不要抄摘!
首先很嘉许你有展现自己的勇气,学习外语不是闭门造车,是需要在不断交流、试错中获得启发和经验的。
25岁开始系统学习外语,其优点是逻辑思维能力相对成熟,对语法规则的理解更加深刻,缺点则是记忆力减退,远不及中小学生那样可以通过大量背诵形成一种潜移默化的语感。对于你的平日学习我的建议是首先“掌握”发音(国际音标不用说的,常见的字母组合也要知道发音,如ea,ou,tion都是最最基本的),其次是通过对相当数量例文的深入理解,总结出最基本的语法规则,为你所用(虽然说语法是死的,但是一些清规戒律是必须牢记的,比方说初中层次的简单陈述句的几种基本结构,现在完成时的2种用法及其与过去时的区别;高中层次的分词定语/状语的用法,定语从句,都是重要而基本的)。再次则是把例文解构,把有用的片语/词汇和句式逐渐积累起来。平时的训练以听读说写译的优先级顺序安排时间和精力。写作是检验能力的手段而不是锻炼能力的手段,所以不要舍本逐末。
你既然写了,我就把一些严重的“全局性的”错误指出来,希望你能够按我说的方法持之以恒地学好英语。
“……and almost know to call me 旺才”
这里可以用定语从句:and almost everyone who knows me calls me Wangcai.
“I was born in Beijing and from a middle family”,这里没有普遍性的错误,只是举出来证明平日积累的重要性。正确的说法:“I was born into a well-off family in Beijing.”
“If I make a mistake , hope everyone to teach me at any time”If引导一个从句,主句没有主语(应是I)是不可饶恕的,另外,hope 不能跟不定式作宾补。可以说“……,I hope you would check it out for me.”
别的我就不说了,以后有什么问题尽管问,大家都很热心。
Nice to meet you ,I am new here .
It is the first day I came to work. The first I want to do is introduce myself .My name is Chirs .But my friends like call me wang cai.They consider itas my nickname.If you didn't mind you can call me it as my friend.My friend.!
I was born in a ordinary family. At Wamgfujing street,building 25th the 16th floor,Room1.If you need any help you could call55555555or55555555555.
I will at your serverice.
I am a student who is to leave school.In school,
I major in computer,at my leisure I have done some part-time jobs.Most of them is not about what I major.But I was a fast learner.I think I can acquire what I will do.
I am interested in watching TV and playing chess.If you have time I recommend 闲人马大姐,in my opinion it is very interesting. It can make you lough.
That's all. Thanks a bunch!
请大家帮我看看怎样翻译这段文字
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允纪一平: I can't finish the homework on time because of repeated practice, and I feel bored.
延安市18749981560: 大家帮忙看看,我这么通知什么地方说的不好的?我错在哪个地方啦?我希望和同事们搞好关系 - ?
允纪一平: 你这样说话,语气太硬,在加上你是个新人,更会让人觉得你拿派头. 通知 一、为积极响应国家提出“低碳环保从小事做起”的倡议,本校通过研究决定,打印纸张尽量做到非重要文件一律双面打印,并且对于造成严重浪费的个人和部门将进行严厉批评,屡教不改者将实行限量供应.二、着装是一个人素质修养的外在体现,好的精神面貌更能给学生树立一个良好的榜样.所以请各位老师不要穿拖鞋等进入办公区,校区内佩戴胸卡,如有不便之处请谅解.你这张通知最好也是双面打印的