有没有人能帮我看下有没有语法错误

有没有人能帮我看下这篇作文有什么语法错误？是讲关于你大学附近常去的一条街。~

be famous for应改成be famous to
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第二行と后面还是加个动词吧，或者改成「友达と楽しい时间を过ごしました」
第三行改成でした吧
第四行还是かかりました
流水账……没什么特别的错误，但是不是文章呀……比如把最后一句话改成「北京の夜の赈やかさに正直惊きました」这样的呢……（要是觉得不好请无视

你好！我对你的文章做了简要改正，自己对比一下。仅供参考：Hello,everyone!
My name is Song Xiaoyan.I'm from Shantou.It is a
beautiful city in Guangdong Province.I love my hometown
and I also welcome you to visit it sometime when you are free.Nice to meet you here.I hope we can be good friends later on.

I'm a livily girl!I like singing , dancing and doing sports
,because I think they can make me strong and bring me good mood.
As for my dream,I'd like to travel to not less than ten countries by the age of 35.I hope it will be come ture.
Thanks for listenning!Thank you very much!

文章文笔不错，尽量克服一些汉式英语的束缚，运用一些高级语法，如：非谓语动词，复合句，强调句型，倒装结构，这样你的文章会生色不少。 词汇运用中，同样意思的词，可以试着选择一些词组或有难度的词：如：忍受---bear stand tolerate put up with ,有选择 运用，我认为这样比较好。
祝学习进步，天天快乐！

你写的很不错！
前面几乎没有需要修改的。
Hello,everyone!
My name is Song Xiaoyan,I'm from Shantou.It is a
beautiful city in Guangdong province.I love my home
town and 【you are also welcome to play here.】
【Nice to meet you here 用法不合适，信息多余，直接删除】
I hope we can be good friends later on.

I'm a livily girl and I like singing 、 dancing and doing sports
,because I think they can bring me good mood.

【As for my dream】,I want to go to ten 【countries】 before 35 years
old.I hope it will 【come/become true.】
Thanks 【a lot】 for listening!【Thank you very much!多余，删除】

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定远县18869048460： 请帮忙看下语法有没有错误 - ？
柞沿依利： 你错的太离谱了.I want to learn English.So i decide to write the english article everyday.Today is the first day.Refueling Refueling Refuelinginsistence insistence insistenceSo tiredI can't use english wellSo I want to improve it

定远县18869048460： 有谁能帮我看看以下句子有没有语法错误.He has studied very hard since he came to college.It has been long time since we left school.Great changs have taken... - ？
柞沿依利：[答案] 没有错误 只有笔误 第一句 用现在完成进行时 更好 has been studying 第二句 用一般现在时 代替现在完成时 也对 it is a long time since. 第三句 plan 是笔误 应该是place 后面的this school应把 this去掉 这样才具有 抽象含义 而不是指具体的建筑物

定远县18869048460： 请帮我看一句话,有没有语法错误. - ？
柞沿依利： 有.要去掉it's. 这本来是个定语从句,你把它变成了宾语从句. that是定语从句的引导词,在从句中作thought的宾语,可是thought后面跟了从句就不缺宾语了,所以就不对了.去掉it's以后,too bad做宾语补足语,at first作状语,缺宾语,就对了.

定远县18869048460： 有谁能帮我看看以下句子有没有语法错误. - ？
柞沿依利： 1、was-is,would-will2、you are hurry,hurry是形容词,前面必须有be动词;3、she前加but,表示转折,否则语境是相反的;4、in front of表示方位,位置,在……前面,不代表前方的……用forward road

定远县18869048460： 帮我看看有木有语法错误 - ？
柞沿依利： 没有语法错误.就是后面的You can前面是句号就应该大写.都好就要小写.你前面是逗号吧.

定远县18869048460： 帮我看下这个句子,有没有什么语法错误! - ？
柞沿依利： Maybe,one day,you would found the girl who is waiting for you is me 这句话有两处错误 found改为find,＂who is waiting for you is me＂中的第一个is要去处 who is waiting for you is me中,形式主语是who,但有两个is,肯定错了,去掉第一个is就行了.看来你还没掌握名词从句的结构呢.

定远县18869048460： 谁帮我看看有没有语法错误?谁帮我看看有没有语法错误,谢谢了!/玫 ？
柞沿依利： 1.I have a dream when I was younger.应该改为I had a dream when I was younger. 2.I moveed to Korea应该改为W很I move to Korea

定远县18869048460： 找人帮下,看看有没语法错误 - ？
柞沿依利： I have been to France during last summer vacation.When we arrived,I saw suc...

定远县18869048460： 有哪位大神能帮我看看有没有语法错误. - ？
柞沿依利： i know that i should study....把 to 去掉. don;t let the future of yours hate the present you......future of 就用 yours..除非你谢 future youit was often said that knowledge can change our fate 重复了

定远县18869048460： 帮忙看下有没有语法错误 - ？
柞沿依利： 如3楼所说将on改为in,但是我不同意3楼所说在because后加of,其他的地方不需要改动