帮我修改一下英语作文，用一般将来时。
初中你这个水平就不错了,但是hobby这个词不要滥用,我给你来个大学水平的.
As a staunch advocate of healthier living, I find many students in my class developed bad eating habits which I'd like to address by providing some useful advices.
Many students often skip their breakfast and believe it is fine to compensate by having more lunch which is actually not the case. Eating three meal with appropriate amount and on time is crucial for healthy living. Also a lot of my peers like eating snacks and fast food owing to their good taste which, as most adults are aware of, is complete wrong. According to World Health Organization, a balanced diet should include at least moderate serves of fruit and vegetables.
Last but not least, many students rarely participate any sports or physical activities based on the excuse that they can concentrate on their study. But the truth is exercise regularly, which means at least three or four times a week, can improve one's efficiency of learning enormously. Just like the older generation believed "A healthy body is the foundation for everything!"
Compared with some western countries, China is indeed performing worse than them in evaluating a student's ability.
个人觉得应该用Comparing ，主语China 与compare 是应该主动的关系吧
Those who have a good memory may get a satisfying mark.
主语是复数，后面的宾语最好用复数吧
Those who have good memories may get satisfying marks.
Second最好改成Secondly 用副词做状语更好一点
Also, the college entrance exam may initimate the students into cramming.
这句话的主语与谓语动词不一致，应改成
Also, the college entrance exam may initimates the students into cramming.
或者Also, the college entrance exams may initimate the students into cramming.
there is more or less fortune, or more exactly, inaccuracy in one exam.
这句中的exactly用错了，应该用一个名词和fortune，inaccuracy对应
The people who are admitted to colleges were regarded as the "fortune-favored" children.
这句话的时态有问题，are 和were用在一个句子中是不是矛盾了，我看你整篇文章都是现在时，
这句话最好改成
The people who are admitted to colleges are regarded as the "fortune-favored" children
追问：
不敢苟同。
1，不知道看哪本书上面写，secondly是用在非正式的文体里。
2，Also, the college entrance exam may initimate the students into cramming.
may后面应该用动词原形啊，没错啊。你反而改错了吧。
3，there is more or less fortune, or more exactly, inaccuracy in one exam. 这句的意思是：多多少少，在考试中都会存在运气，或者更准确地说，不准确。
My winter holiday was very happy and unforgettable.I skated and made a snowman with my father and my friends.I often stayed at home and did my housework.Sometimes I helped my mother doing housework and watched TV.I hope that everybody will be happy in the new year .
你这个得用一般过去式。
My winter holiday was very happy and unforgettable.I skated and made a snowman with my father and my friends.I often stayed at home and did my school work.Sometimes I helped my mother do housework or watched TV.I hope everybody had a happy new year.
希望采纳哦~~
I am loooking forward the winter holiday. I will make a snowman with my friend and skate on snow if we get enough snow. I will take some time stay at home to do my homework and wathc TV. I am also going to help my mom to do some housework in the holiday. I hope everybody have a great holiday.
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