英语作文大家帮我瞧瞧，高手指点指点

大家帮帮看下这个英语作文呗，谢谢啦.~

没有On another hand这种说法，只能说on the other hand,同时，on on hand,onthe other hand 一般是用于两种不同的观点或者事物的两个不同方面，比如有人同意，有人不同意。或者一个硬币有两个方面等，如果作者想要用三种理由来表达，可以简单的用firstly,secondly,thirdly;或者，to begin with, further more, then, finally,等等，最后一个句子，不能用can't emphasize,你可以说we should put emphasis on protecting water resource!还有第二段的第二句话也错了，如果要用so....that 句型的话，只能说the water is precious that we shouldn't waste it!另外can't afford to 一般用来表达没有足够的钱来买什么，用在这里不合适!
另外你说的那个过渡段，建议你可以说There are several ways we can do to protect our resouce

Dear Lucy
Thank you for your letter..It helped me a lot.I lost my keys on last Monday.Good weather that day, I came home to find the key is missing.I was very anxious.My mother got home, I was at the door waiting for two hours.Remember the night before I put it in the bag, somehow disappeared.I'll buy a new one. Thank you for your concern.

Have a nice day

Your friend Mike.

译文、

亲爱的露西
谢谢你的来信的。它帮了我很多。我失去了我的钥匙的最后一个星期一。那天天气很好，我回到家，发现钥匙不见了。我很着急。我妈妈回家，我在门口等了2个小时。记得前一天晚上，我把它放在袋，莫名其妙地失踪了。我要买个新的。谢谢你的关心。
祝你愉快
你的朋友迈克。


吼吼、求采纳、

交通用工具工作
如生活标准是比较高,更多交通工具
|如生活标准正在变得比较高又越来越多的人正在买汽车.
|汽车是一个有用的工具。首先，驾驶汽车能节省许多时间||首先，驾驶汽车能节省许多时间.除此之外,从一个地方到目的地开车是方便的和舒服的.
然而,在处理汽车方面, 我能 t 但是承认汽车有许多缺点,第一, 方便的当汽车是,我们找停车地方是难的. |此外，越来越多的汽车将会引起空气污染和意外事件. ||此外，在尖峰时间中，我们必须开车得慢慢. |除了这之外，它很重要汽车很贵.

交通用工具工作
如生活标准是比较高,更多交通工具
|如生活标准正在变得比较高又越来越多的人正在买汽车.
|汽车是一个有用的工具。首先，驾驶汽车能节省许多时间||首先，驾驶汽车能节省许多时间.除此之外,从一个地方到目的地开车是方便的和舒服的.
然而,在处理汽车方面, 我能 t 但是承认汽车有许多缺点,第一, 方便的当汽车是,我们找停车地方是难的. |此外，越来越多的汽车将会引起空气污染和意外事件. ||此外，在尖峰时间中，我们必须开车得慢慢. |除了这之外，它很重要汽车很贵.

最后自己的观点有些偏激。我认为这样比较好:As far as I`m concerned, we should use cars properly and I suggest the government control the number of cars so that we can live a happier life.

The traffic tool ＝Means of transportation
one place to destination=one place to another
convenient as cars are=conveient as it is
accident=accidence

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