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第一段的less and less好像怪怪的，应该改成there are very seldom people.....
第二段的As weall know是As well know
第三段的excellent books好像用得不对，应该是用good来代替excellent就好了(good books)
So we have time and necessary to focus on excellent books.
应该是...
So, we should take the time out to read those good books.
很多字应该要分开写，是忘记了吗？
比如说the response，greatest contribution，people in，my perspective，reading classics，undergraduates have.
纯属意见.
你写的是一篇文章的全部，还是一部分？
总觉得开头的很突然，结尾的也很突然。
开头一般总得有点“引入”
结尾，总得有个结论，你写这篇文章的结论要明确的写出来，老师改卷子忙，没空细看。
英文作文就是开门见山，每段开头或结尾就要有句明显的总结该段的话，别和中文一样绕来绕去。有了中心句，再展开论述（理由），字数不够了再添点例子。。。。。
2。must 用在第一句不妥。应该用have to.
3。think的用法错误。要否定提前。i don't think that you have mood to do anything.
4。from my stand point 有错，应该改为in my opinion 或者in my point即可。
5。where is a will... 改为where there is a will,there is a way.
6。下一句应该改为you should and you could get out from the tough（go through也可以）
7。第二段第一句，主语从句缺少主语，应该改为what i can do now.主句也有问题。全句应该改为：what i can do now is to give you some suggestions and i hope it would help you.
8。第二段第二句，没有at the first place 的说法，应该是firstly 或者at first.
9。say 后面为宾语从句，不能用it引导。应该用that。应该改为I have to say that again that you should cheer up and be confident.其实这里显得非常累赘。直接用i think you should cheer up and be confident即可。
10。at the second place 改为secondly.(与前面对应）
11。建议别人不能用must,应该用should。
13。correct the reason不搭配。直接用make some changes即可。
14。imformation是不可数名词，应该用is搭配。如果连上后面的advice应该改为：there is also much imformation and advices on/about how to succeed in your career.这里应该用就近原则。be动词跟前面的information不跟后面的advices.
15.i will do anything i can不妥，应该用i will do everything i can.而且whenever you need my hand太罗唆，直接用anytime在后面即可。即为：i will do everything i can to support you,any time.
16.最后一句，best wishes to you,from your best friend.再加姓名。
总的来说，这篇文章完全是中文思维写好后翻译过去的，不是从英文的角度去思考的。所以，很多中式英语。语句不通顺。希望能改进。谢谢。
Where is a will 应该是 where there is a will;
Now all I can do is to give your 改为 give you ;
imformation and advice 应该用复数；
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