修改英语小短文

请帮我翻译并修改一下这篇英语小短文，真的很急！！~

subject改为subjects,
and more 改为and so on
song改为songs
On P.E. class 和On computer class中，把On改为In
play the basketball 去掉the
play the computer game中改为 games
这是我找到的语法错误，语言方面你自己改一下。

的确写得不好，语法错误太多，语言太中式，不知道你要表达的是什么，所以需要好好修改。加油，孩子

Editor,
Hello!I'm a student ,i have some questions to talk with you. I find some students have eyesights problems .But we all are know that students have to study hard,so they must read many books frequently.But they read under a very bright sunshine or at night if there is no light.And they read on the table or in the bed.The eye expert have also told us that we musn't read like this ,oherwise,your eyesight will down.
Editor please concentrate on us students and help us.
sincely
XXX
xxx

我大概改了一下。
Dear Editor,
Hello!I'm a student ,i have some questions to discuss with you. I always find some students have eyesights problems .But we all know that students should study hard,so they must read more books frequently.But they read under the bright sunshine or at night without light.And they read on the table and on the bed.The eye expert also tell us that we couldn't read by this way.If we always do this for a long time,your eyesight will down.
Editor please concentrate on students and help us.
yours,
xxx

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