求高手帮忙看看英文的自我介绍？。请帮忙修改错误地方！

高手来帮忙看看这篇英语自我介绍有没有什么错误之处~

基本上没什么问题，就是有一些小细节，比如玩乐器是 play the +乐器名 ，你可以把你写的文字放在有道词典里面翻译一遍，检查一遍。

Good day, everybody! It is really my great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself here. I hope that I can make a good impression on you. My name is Zhang Bingjie, and I was born in Xingjiang, a remote place where I spent my happy childhood. In 2000, I graduated from ABC University, major in Chinese language and literature. Shortly after my graduation, I left my hometown and came to Shanghai. Thereafter, I started living on my own and learned to face the social pressure alone. 10 years, only a drop in the ocean of human history, makes me change from an innocent girl to a mature and independent woman. In these years, I’ve worked in several companies with different bosses and different colleagues, started as an office clerk and became a top manager finally. The industries that I’ve engaged in ranging from advertizing, manufacture to logistics. The last two companies that I’ve worked at belong to logistics industry. From 2005 to 2008, I served as General Manager’s assistant and later manager of management department in Shanghai ABC Company which is one of the most prestigious customs clearance agencies in Shanghai. During that time, I learned a great deal of knowledge in customs affairs. Based on these knowledge, a performance appraisal system for all levels of employees among the company had been designed and implemented. It turns out that the system is effective for improving work efficiency and quality. From 2008 to 2010, I worked as a project manager of logistics department in YN Ltd. There, my key tasks are to Supervise and control the whole process of logistics project, ranging from booking, picking up goods, ocean shipping/sea transportation, customs clearance, transportation by land or rail to final delivery. As a result, I got much practical experience of logistics operation. Moreover, during 2005 and 2008, I completed all the self-study courses on English language and literature in Shanghai International Studies University and got the second bachelor’s degree.
In 2010, I got a baby girl and then quit the job. Now, I am a happy mother and a satisfied wife. But I also need to have my own career. So, I’m here now. Before I close, something I must say is, sometimes youth has nothing to do with age, because youth is a kind of mind-set and spirit. Often, ability has nothing to do with diploma, because ability increases in practice. I’m the one with positive attitude and rich experience. Please give my application materials a serious consideration and then give me a chance, I’m sure I will give you a surprise in return.
Thank you very much!

Good afternoon。

I am XX. Thank you for giving me the opportunity. It is really a great honor for me to have this opportunity for the interview.

The following is my brief introdution. I am 19 years old and currently study in Shanghai Nanhu Vocational School and will graduate in 2009.

My specialty is air attending service. In the past three years, I worked hard for acquiring some skills and preparing myself for the future career, such as understanding e-tickets, about security check, and other flight-related subjects.

I have very good study records in school and I will continue to prove my capability in learning in the remaining two years. I am also a responsible and conscientious person with a warm heart. As a service-oriented person, I understand well on customers' needs.

Generally speaking, I am a hard working student especially in doing things I am interested in. If I am given the opportunity, I will do my best to complete all assignments no matter how difficult they would be.

Thank you.

记住要好好读顺它。坚持每天读15分钟，把语感练出来。祝你好运！

1.I participate in this interview
2.my speciality(特色)
3.I spent about 3 years learning what I would need in the work in the future
4." In the school my nearly all school record was fine"病句 改为my score on study is good in the school
5.diplomas
差不多吧~~

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