有哪位好心人士可以帮我修改这篇作文？

有没有哪位好心人能帮我修改纠正一篇不算作文，也不算文章的文字？~

个人改的东西才是最好的，起码是你现状最佳的。

Whether to go abroad for further study, or to continue study for more advanced courses in home country, or to look for jobs is the decision a post-secondary school graduate has to make. Since this decision has a great impact on one's life, one must decide carefully and select the choice that best suits whose needs. However

Leadership is（改成plays,play a role in) a crucial role in functioning and managing a certain group. Regardless of the type of the group(我觉得改为whatever type the group is更流畅点，呵呵，个人看法，你这个词组regardless of也不错), a leader is usually the one who contributes the most (within that group)还是去掉吧，前边已经有the group了，况且是一个长句子. in order to reach a common goal.
A leader organizes events, makes decisions and helps the group members to solve any problems(改为单数，因为前边是any) that they encounter. In fact, being a leader requires a lot of skills, such as communication skill, listening skill, organization skill and teamwork skill（这几个skill是不是去掉好点，前边已经申明是skills了，没必要再重复了). There are also many other qualities essential for one to become a leader. As a student who has played various leadership roles in the past few years, I have developed many essential qualities that a leader requires(is required,作为一个领导被要求做到的，虽然汉语里翻译成主动，但英语里还是要被动形式的）. (I believe that I am qualified to be one of the future leaders who will make positive contributions to the world).括号里的句子放到最后吧，表达你成为领导者后为世界做贡献的决心，和原本最后一句合并起来可以这样写：and make our earth a better/happier place to live in ) Through my various tutoring and teaching experiences, I have become a responsible, supportive, open-minded and a confident leader. Whenever I am (I am可以省略，因为主句和从句的主语一致）given a task or an assignment, I always take great care of（我觉得用pay great attention to/place great emphasis on意思更准确点，十分重视关注) it or（and应该是并且的意思啊） finish it before the deadline. I treat everyone fairly and supportively, and I am always willing to lend the students a hand when needed. I also provide equal opportunities for students to share their opinions, and I am always receptive（改为acceptive,它的意思是接受，采纳，而receive只是表示收到，接受与否就不知道了） to new ideas and thoughts. Moreover, I am a confident person who always shows(takes) positive attitude and(shows) sincerity towards people who(whom,people做with的宾语嘛） I work with.
I have beliefs in myself that as a leader, I can make my community a better place.
结尾改好后就把它作为最后一段了，总体来说你写的还是挺不错的，用到了好多复杂的句型和词组，我修改的也只是一些细节问题，你可以酌情采纳．另外应该分段吧，三段或四段就行了．呵呵

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