给教授的英文信, 可否帮我check文法? 如何使语气变得更有礼貌吗?谢~~

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更新1:

i had often visited CityU and PolyU since June. none of them is willing to grant me an interview to present my porfolio. So none of them can take a look at my arorks. I think they pick the students to interview base on result.

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However
i believe result cannot represents the art ability of someone. i wonder how to make professor willing to take a look at my arorks. it was because i don't want to be considered fail before my works are seen. Tomorrow i plan to visit CityU again because it is its interview day.

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i was not invited so i may not be allowed to meet the professor
do you think i should knock the door or something? Regards
xxx

Good luck
pal. Dear Professor X (Spell his/her name)
You are exceedingly kind to have lent me a helping hand. Although my Advanced levels results meet the mininum entrance requirements of univesities in Hong Kong
it is apparently not good enough. I think that is the reason why no university has granted me an interview so far. Thank you for your help again although I believe that I have very slim chance of participating the programme. I have made a few visits to the City University and the Polytechic Universty since June. None of them is willing to grant me an interview. I think universtiies use students' academic results as the criteria for interviews. However
I believe academic results alone cannot represent adequately the ability of students who study Art. I do not know how to make professors looking at my arork. While I do not want to concede failure before my work is seen by interviewers
I plan to visit City Univeristy again tomorrow because they start interviewing candidates tomorrow. Since I was not invited for an interview so I may not be allsowed to meet the professor. Do you think it is wise for me to knock the door so as to obtain a chance of interview? Thank you for you kind attention and I look forward to recieving your kind advice. Yours sincerely (Regards is too casual)
xxx N.B. Don't use abbreviations and short forms.

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