帮我看下我写的这篇英语作文 可能有很多地方错了 请帮我改改谢谢

帮我看下这篇英语作文有语法错误吗？ 如果有请帮我改一下 如果有哪里可以修改变的更好也请指出 谢谢~

我认为把第一个I'm so sorry 改为I'm afraid(that)较好，跟第二个道歉不重复，同样委婉表达出自己的歉意又丰富作文内容

同学你好，我不是什么英语大神，但我很想帮你这个忙。以下是我觉得可以修改一下的地方，不一定全哦！Firstly，clean your teeth 用brush your teeth也很好。Secondly，我觉得你这个have to（不得不）用得怪怪的，不是说不对，就是你后面又说了句你喜欢古筝，但have to又让我感觉你很不情愿去上古筝课。Thirdly，“My teacher says I guzheng very will”改成“My teacher said that I play the guzheng very well."可能会比较好。Fourthly，I have busy Sunday中间 加个a 可能会更通顺 I have a busy Sunday。希望能帮到你。不知道你是几年级？

Recently my English can impove a lotsinve i have some experence 时态错，用现在完成时, has improved a lot. I have something to share with you as follows.
loudly->aloud （前者强调是噪音，后者是大声）
every morning分开写，不要连一起
it cans make you find a good sinse of English better. cans?you?good?better? -> It enables me to find a better sense of English.
usually/some这里不要连用，经常听一些歌，去掉some吧，后面又是your，改成my，统一人称的称谓
你通篇的称谓一会儿i/me，一会儿you/your的，太乱了，该什么用什么！
Third, if you are free at the weekend .you can go to the English corner which is a club of English communicating can train your English too,and improve very quickly i think. -> Third, I go to the English Corner on weekends, a gathering place for people to communicate in English, which helps a lot for my English improvement.

接下来一段：I've found many different ways to memorize new words as the words is the key to (to是介词，后面跟名词) fluent English .For example, I read English novels ever day which I can understand without too much diffculties. 你这里上面不是说过听歌了，为什么又出现了？我没改，最好去掉listening to English songs and remember which them saying as soon as posible and so on.
I think if you can （不要can）do you（改成your） best and insist on exercising (and practising as I do), you will (certainly) success(这是名词，要用动词succeed） in English study finally!Remember believe in yourself 记住相信自己，记住去做某事，remember to do...-> Do remember（加Do表示强调语气）to believe in yourself.
Thinks~ ->这个单词也能拼错？

hello everbody!
Recently my English can impove a lotsinve i have some experence
First, I insist on reading English loudly everymoring for half a hour . It can make you find a good sinse of English better.
Second,I usually listen to English songs or tapes when i am free or having dinner .It is a good way to improve your interest in English .
Third, if you are free at the weekend .You can go to the English corner which is a club of English communicating
can train your English too,and improve very quickly i think.
Last but not least,you can find many different ways to learn the new words as the words is the key to improve your english .For example, youcan read some English novels everday which is you can understand easiely.listening to English songs and remember which them saying as soon as posible and so on.
I think if you can do you best and insist on exercising ,you will success in English finally!
Remember believe in yourself
Thinks~

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