英语作文求语法和句式修改，谢谢

英语作文修改（语法句式之类的有没什么错误）~

I owe a great deal to you for what you'v help me.（...the help that you have given to me.给予某人帮助用短语give sb. help或give help to sb.）But for you,I can't study in ... . It's just the most ... .(It's the reason that ...或that‘s why I can... ，分析：如果表示的是“做什么事的原因”之类，就用why；如果是“他给的原因”之类，就用that/which。用none of 使语义刚好相反,有悖原文。）
...when I stayed in ...事情发生在过去，不能用动词原形stay；况且In the days when I stayed in Canada 和后面的句意不怎么搭配，不如改为I remember the days when I stayed in Canada.独立一个句子。By this way改为In this way 用这种方法。Most of all...gave me will be...改用被动式，如果将原句精简就是：the memories that I will ...显然句子不通...memories 【记忆】怎么能施加动作呢?
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Nowadays, a word called “competent” is widely used in the society, which caused stressful atomosphere among people. To accomplish their goals, people try their best to accomplish their work only for more money and fame. Thus, people are easy to get more pressure from both work and life, and that’s the reason why people’s average weight are increasing but their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.

It is well-known that more stress may cause people getting more fat. Because some people don’t keep to a regular time to do the proper things they should and may stay up late in the night for hours. For example, my history teacher is 24 years now but since she has taught 30 classes for a week and what's more she haven't the time to relax, however, she’s now gaining more fat and can easily become ill. Learning this from my teacher, we can make a conclusion that work under high pressure not only makes people unhealthy but also gives negative influence on life and regular work..

Moreover, stress also can easily make people get angry, which plays an important part in people’s unhealthy lifestyle. This is because when people get angry, they choose to eat more foods than before to eliminate their bad tempers. Meanwhile, when some people get angry, they may give up doing sports as they should everyday, and this in turn, causes the lack of exercises. By and by, people pay less attention on living a peaceful and healthful life but instead they chose to live a irregular and high-stressed life in the end, which also leads to their attitude towards the world a more negative one.

From what I have discussed above, it’s a great way for people reaching for their hopes. And I think little stress could make people be more successful. So, I reckon that people need a more peaceful life to enjoy health and also to enjoy true life.

修改了一下用词语法和句型~~希望对你有用~

你都七级了，还不会自己修改啊，是想有意考我们吧，*-* *-*

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