自己写了个小短文,错误多多,麻烦大家帮忙改改错。谢谢!!!
It was Sunday, nothing really special today.
My classmate came and we did exercise in the afternoon.
First, we played badminton for about one hour. I think we played quite well. I felt so good each time I hit the shuttlecock. I can even played with my left hand. And so did my classmate.
Next, we played Chinese chess. To tell you the truth, we don’t play it quite often. So we are not that good. When we played, nobody would bother to watch us play at all, not for even one minute. They stopped and went, signing, then shaking their heads.
I felt a little bit embarrassed. Though we weren’t good at
chess, the most important thing was that we did have a good time. Our final score was 2:2. (Tied)
Yeah! We are two happy chess pieces!
天哪地哪哇: 1. 首先表扬你自己把这篇故事写完.这是一篇完整的故事,有时间,有人物,有活动,有描述.下次若能再多加些自己的感受就更好了.
有几个小问题要注意: 1.写当天做过的事,最好用过去时态:简单,清楚. 很多时候中文表示已经做的事,在英文里并不是要用完成时态来表达的.
2. 尽量多看英文原文.感觉你的表达方式很多还是用中文的思维表达方式,如水平底(level is low)等. 今后看到好的词组,可以把它们记在一个小本子上,写作时拿出来看,就有现成的了.
3.写叙述文时,你可模仿这个模式: One day---First---Next---Then---Finally
4. 你今天要记的单词:羽毛球shuttlecock, 摇头shake(shook) one’s head
5.文章要有题目(title)
最后,keep up the good job!
你写得不错.我帮你修改了些英文习惯的用法.如果你能自己比较一下或是找出不同的地方,那样你的英文就会进步更大.希望下次能写些正面的文章.写些好人的故事.你这个故事给我来写,我可能会写成"一个无助的人"想想那老人内心的伤痛,无奈,无助,他为啥半夜大叫呢.一定是悲伤到了极点,真想伸出双手去帮助他......"你换个角度来写,文章会很感人.多几分同情,少几分愤恨.你会是个快乐人.
祝好!
A nuisance
There is a nuisance in my neighborhood. He is an old man whose house is right next to mine. My house is at No.18 and his is at No.22.
. Perhaps you'll ask why I call him a nuisance neighbor. Ok, let me tell you why. Every night when everybody is sound asleep, this old man will stand alone on his veranda after two am.,. Calling loudly!
He has some accents. I don’t quite understand what he says... but I can understand he was cursing our country as well as our Communist party.
Party, community, etc... The man shouted at least one hour every night... He has been acting like this for three months...
Perhaps the government has done something unfair to him. He can have a lot of complaint. But he shouldn’t bother other people when they have a nice rest... He shouldn’t just think about his own feelings.
But we have no idea what to do with him since he is a crazy person.
I really wish he could be sent to an asylum.
I'm currently a freshman. The topic that I want to talk about today is education at university . When graduated from middle highschool, I had adead of me many a choice for the future: either Looking for a job to make lots of money, going to college for a higher degree,or even joining the military service. Eventually , I chose to be a student in this university, just like most of us . Why is that ?
One reason is that college education is not only the preparation for future careers, but also it prepare us for the rest of our lives.
Secondly , college education may contribute to a good understanding of the world as well as ourselves, adding spice to life, enriching our horizon ,and broaden our visions .
As the saying goes , "the more you learn, the more you earn" - and they are more than just money
不如你发个中文的,帮你写吧。这恐怕得“洗心革面”了
I'm a freshman. Topic of conversation that i will talk about is today's university education.When I graduate from highschool,i will have a lot of choices for my future.Look for a job to go and earn mnch money;study in university for a higher degree,;even join the army.But I have studied in university,this is as same as most of people.Why is this?
Because the college education is not only preparation for a career, but also a preparation for life. The college education may help you understand world even better. Let the life be richer and the field of vision more open.
As what have been said, "The more you learn,the more you earn. " Not only the matter of money.
I'm a freshman. The topic that want to talk about is the education at university in today. When I graduated from highschool, I had a lot of choices for my future: Looking for a job and making some money; going to college and getting a higher degree,; or even joining the army. Finally, I came here and be a student in this university, just like the most people doing. Why is this?
Because the high education is not only the preparation for a career, it is also for the rest of life. The college may help you to understand the world. Let the life be richer, the field of vision be more open.
I'm a freshman. Today I'd like to talk about the education system of universities. When I graduated from high school, I had many choices of my future - to find a job to earn some money, to continue my education for higher qualifications, or even to join the army. Eventually I chose university, same as the majority. Why?
Because the education of universities does not only prepare you for the career, but also make you ready for your future life. It can make you understand yourself and the world better. It can enrich your life and widen your vision as well.
Just like the old saying, "the more you learn, the more you earn" - and the things you earn are more than just money.
第二句:today I'll talk about the university education .
第三句:graduated from high school,I had many choices of future.
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